Final Teacher's Correction for MEMO by V.Ilic

It could be a good idea to start this memo with an introductory sentence in which you should thank your boss for her/his letter. Also, you could finish off by expressing your appreciation for your boss’s confidence in you.

Also – Also,
would ask you – would like to ask you
is soon – will come soon
arguments - arrangements

FINAL T'S CORRECTION OF INFORMATION SHEET by V.Ilic

Vera, here are some notes to guide you further in your corrections.


Correction Notes for Making New Friends

- way of meeting – way to meet
- joining in – joining
- people who enjoys – people who enjoy
- differently – definitely
- sports acting – sports, acting
- Young Amateurs – What kind of amateurs?
- a big firework – the big fireworks
- ways of earning money and having – ways to earn money and have
- working … work – Avoid repetition by saying, e.g. ‘…which will take you five hours only ‘.
- listen music – listen to music
- CD player – a CD player
- all kind – all kinds
- besides … also – Repetition: omit ‘also’.
- a large tennis and basketball court – large tennis and basketball courts
- best way possible and be welcome – best possible way and welcome
- So – So,

TYPICAL ERRORS 2 KEY

Here is the key for hard workers. You will find it bellow the wrong sentences




The following sentences have one or more spelling, punctuation, grammar or vocabulary error. Type the wrong word or phrase, follow it by /, and then type the correct alternative.
Example:
You will read: He doesn't have many informations about this film.
You will type: many informations / much information

1. Every day we hear about gernetic modified food.
2. Usually people use some pesticides, fungicides or other medicines to protect their plants.
3. I ask myself will the next generation enjoy a meal like this.
4. More work was done for a shorter time.
5. The park looked like a desert, although it had flowers, trees and all those stuff for kids.
6. New technology is rising its level every day.
7. Petnica Cave is on the top list of caves in Europe, however it is not looking very nice.
8. Just think what jobs can you do at the same time on the Internet.
9. Let us just hope to the best.
10. Chickens can lay three times more eggs than that they used to.

Answers:

1. genetic modified food / genetically modified food
2. other medicines/other chemicals (substances)
3. will the next generation enjoy / whether the next generation will enjoy
4. for a shorter time / in a shorter time
5. all those stuff / all that stuff
6. rising its level / raising its level
7. it is not looking very nice / it does not look very nice
8. what jobs can you do / what jobs you can do
9. hope to the best / for the best
10. than that they used to / then they used to

Final T's Correction for ARTICLE AND NOTE by I.Sinakijevic

Ivana, I hope these corrections will also be helpful.

Article- The article has 222 words instead of 150, and the note 89 instead of 100.
- It would be y good idea to indent your paragraphs in order to make them more prominent.
- you’ll be – you will be (stronger)
- ‘Green Issue’ represented the ‘Adopt a whale’ ...
This is an unfinished sentence, which is not suitable for your task – you are the one who is writing the article for the ’Green Issues’ of your college magazine.
- represent – present.
’Represent’ means ’to act for another person or people’, and ’present’ means ’to
make known’.
- like – such as or for example/instance
- black and white photo - a black and white photo
- make an amazing experience – have / go through an amazing experience
- charity – a charity

Note- The first sentence should include thanks for the advert.
- an advert – the advert. You and your friend know which one.
- but not suitable for Peter – not very tactful, make it softer, e.g. ’I’m not sure it would be quite suitable for Peter.’ You should also explain why.
- We don’t even know if he has a video – make it softer, e.g. ’We don’t know if he has a video, either.’
- it is boring – it could be boring
- elder guy – an older guy (elder is mostly used for members of a family)
- He won’t have time to look after him – the rubric implies whales in the wild
- The book – a book
- But – Anyway,
- Was - is

Final T's Corrections for FORMAL LETTER by I.Sinakijevic

Ivana, here are corrections for the formal letter. I will send you the rest at 8.30 p.m.

- advertisement – For what? Extend it with : ...for a grant from the Green Trust
- In my further letter – in this letter
- the certain details – certain details
- because – this should be deleted to make the sentence clearer
- have not ever met with recycling – has never had any experience in recycling
- and it is also one of the factors which affected towns’ budget – , which is also one of the factors that
seriously affects the town’s budget
- containers – separate containers
- this – It seems as if this refers back to solving the problem and you cannot add a problem to a solution
of a problem; expand as follows: In addition to the problem of wasting reusable glass
- pollution –air pollution, you did not develop the problem of air pollution
- Are you going to put up a paper container as well?
- by – should be deleted
- the trees – trees
- on it – should be deleted
- in purpose to – for/with the purpose of
- We will this – We will advertise this
- dustman – dustmen, or even better, refuse collectors
- The given money we will spend – the grant money will be spent
- the sponsors which will help us to buy the machines. Sponsors who will help us buy machines. Which
machines?

TYPICAL ERRORS 2 ASSIGNMENT

TYPICAL ERRORS 2

The following sentences have one or more spelling, punctuation, grammar or vocabulary error. Type the wrong word or phrase, follow it by /, and then type the correct alternative.
Example:
You will read: He doesn't have many informations about this film.
You will type: many informations / much information

1. Every day we hear about gernetic modified food.
2. Usually people use some pesticides, fungicides or other medicines to protect their plants.
3. I ask myself will the next generation enjoy a meal like this.
4. More work was done for a shorter time.
5. The park looked like a desert, although it had flowers, trees and all those stuff for kids.
6. New technology is rising its level every day.
7. Petnica Cave is on the top list of caves in Europe, however it is not looking very nice.
8. Just think what jobs can you do at the same time on the Internet.
9. Let us just hope to the best.
10. Chickens can lay three times more eggs than that they used to.

TYPICAL ERRORS 1 KEY

Dear Zucchinis, here it is finally, the key for Typical Errors 1, just below the sentences, which I copied again so that you can have everything in one place.

TYPICAL ERRORS 1

The following sentences have one or more spelling, punctuation, grammar or vocabulary error. Type the wrong word or phrase, follow it by /, and then type the correct alternative.
Example:
You will read: He doesn't have many informations about this film.
You will type: many informations / much information

1.I’m very greatfull for your offer.
2.This summer camp should give both opportunities – to enjoy in sports and to improve my English.
3.I would like to know in what accommodation we are going to be?
4.I hope you will answer on all of my questions.
5.I would like to know how much does it all costs.
6.For this reason, I applied for a sports holiday in New Zealand where are included English classes.
7.I would like to know how many classes are we going to have.
8.Inform me about the final cost, included the English language tuition.
9.I hope you will let me know about all these information.
10.I am writing in order to inquire some information regarding the sports holiday in the South Island.
11.Probably because of all this activities that I plan to do I wouldn’t have much time to spend with you.
12.My family are looking forward to see you again.
13.You’d better come at our place.
14.We have a lot to catch up, so if you can come just call us.
15.It’s basically a sports holiday, but I’ll also have a tuition for English.
16.I would like to have a further information about the accommodation.
17.Do you offer any extra help in your English courses for weeker attendants?

Answers:

1. greatfull / grateful
2. enjoy in sports / enjoy sports
3. ? / -
4. on / -
5. does / -
6. where are included English classes / which includes English classes
7. are we going / we are going
8. included / including
9. these information / this information
10. inquire some information / inquire about some information
11. this activities /these activities
12. looking forward to see / looking forward to seeing
13. come at / come to
14. to catch up / catch up on
15. a tuition for / tuition in
16. a / -
17. attendants / students or course takers

T's Correction for INFORMATION SHEET by M.Acimovic

Marko, here are some tips which could be useful for your writing.

- It is not clear whether ’New Activities’ paragraph includes the paragraphs that follow or it is independent. If it includes them, you should have some other different paragraphs; if it does not, it should be longer.
- You could have included some semi-formal ways of meeting people: e.g. A Swimming Day for all students, Lectures and Forums organised by the school management.
- couple - a couple
- big swimming pool - a big swimming pool
- many other - many others
- you can try yourself on culture field – you can have a try in the culture field
- sections – clubs
- specially – especially
’Specially’ and’especially’ are interchangeable when they mean ’for a particular purpose’;
Use ’especially’ when you want to give emphasis to something or someone.

T'S CORRECTION FOR ARTICLE 2: STRANGERS IN THE NIGHT by I.Sinakijevic

Gradac Gorge 

Ivana, here are some correction notes that can help you write your final version
- Your writing is too long – there are 388 words.
- sound of the train – sound of a train
- take a bit of patience – have a bit of patience
- in early hours – in the early hours
- to monastery – to the monastery
- twitter of owls – hooting of owls
- when we heard – when we saw
- We passed next to the monastery – we passed the monastery (went past the monastery)
- to river – to the river
- there was a lot of camping fires – there were a lot of camping fires
- because she needed a bathroom – she needed to relieve herself
- she came back. And she was screaming – she came back screaming
- her a blizzard next to her neck – put a lizzard on her neck
- more down – further down
- decide to give us a bit more of enjoyment in nature – decided to treat ourselves to some more
enjoyment of nature
- wanted – set off
- one wonderful place by river but upper – a wonderful place up the river
- streak – railway track(s)
- the tunnel – a tunnel
- had put – put
- rails the – the rails
- it – the tunnel
- had heard – heard
- a sound – the sound
- stocked next – pressed ourselves
- it – the train
- stood on our legs – keep our balance
- by regular track – along the regular path (to avoid confusing with railway track)

1ST CHECK OF ARTICLE 2: STRANGERS IN THE NIGHT by I.Sinakijevic

Ivana, please polish your article. I put some parts to be improved in bold.

STRANGERS IN THE NIGHTThe sound of the train…Four teenagers in the tunnel…Just a few seconds are
left…
You’ll have to take a bit of patience to read the rest of the story. It all started in early hours on 1st of May. Three girls and one boy had gone on traditional morning hiking. One of these girls was me. We decided to go to the monastery Cells and then go down to the river Gradac. On our way to monastery was a big forest.
The trees were spread widely apart and they were tall but it was dark because it was 3 o’clock AM. We could hear the twitter of owls and rustling of small animals and bugs. We were scared. We heard a scream of one of our friends and when we heard that it was just a frog, we got relieved. We soon realized that it even wasn’t a frog; it was just a stone which looked like it. Later, the atmosphere was much better, the sun was rising and we were laughing. We passed next to the monastery and went down to river. It was very cold and there was a lot of camping fires which were still burning. One girl went to one small forest because she needed a bathroom. Just a few seconds after she left, she came back. And she was screaming. One drunk guy thought it was interesting to put her a blizzard next to her neck.
We went more down and set down to eat our breakfast. When it became warm and sunny we decide to give us a bit more of enjoyment in nature, so we wanted to visit one wonderful place by river but upper.
We again passed through another thick but much smaller forest and we were on streak. We had to pass through the tunnel. We had put our ears next to rails the and listened. There was no sign of a train. We were brave, so we went into it. After 20 meters we had heard a sound of the train. We run out and stocked next to the stone wall. It was so fast that we hardly stood on our legs.
We survived and we went straight back home by regular track. Otherwise I wouldn’t be able to tell you this story.

1ST CHECK of ARTICLE 2: PUNTING TROUBLES by M.Jankovic

Marija, please improve the parts of text that are put in bold.

Punting Troubles

It is rather strange and funny how silly things always happen to those who try hard to avoid them. Obviously standing aside and trying to be an observer is not a good and recommendable tactic; well, at least in some situations. However, additional experience, no matter how strange it was, is always a precious one as it teaches you a valuable lesson. And, I would certainly remember the following one to the rest of my life.
It all happened in 2001, in July, during my stay in Cambridge. Even though every moment I spent there was precious, the thing that happened to me on one Wednesday affected me the most.
My friends and I went punting on the River Cam. The punting station was crowded with students from all over the world. We were all waiting for a guide who was supposed to announce the beginning of the adventure, and divide us into small groups.
Very soon I found myself in a group of five strangers, what made me feel a bit confused and uncomfortable. As these people were very kind and friendly my bad mood did not last long.
We got into the boat, but soon discovered that we were on our own, without any help of a professional rower. So here we were at the beginning of our nightmare. While other teams were sailing down the river, we were trying to move the boat from the starting position and to calm it. Not only did we worsen the situation by rotating the boat and going from one bank to another, but we became the object of ridiculing of those who were observing what was happening.
Finally, we decided not to torture ourselves anymore. We stopped, got out of the boat, sat on the grass and started joking. But not for long, as others were coming back to the start, so we had to move the boat once again. This time I took the command over a boat. Never had I felt such fear, as in that moment.
We managed somehow. Although we were only thirty meters away from the punting station we got there last. The crew was so happy to feel the ground under their feet again, and they all praised me to be an excellent captain.

You can imagine how much this adventure helped me feeling great self-confidence. It is certainly worth all those troubles.

INFORMATION SHEET by v.Ilic - 1ST CHECK

Vera, here is one more of you compositions for you to correct on the bases of hints in bold.

Making new friends

Clubs
The easiest way of meeting people in our college is certainly by joining in one of many clubs here. If you are the type of people who enjoys poetry then you should differently be a part of the New Poets clubs. Also, there are sports acting and music clubs.

Events
On 12th of May starts the competition of the Young Amateurs of Bristol where all the colleges will compete for the prize. It is a big spectacle where a lot of people come and it always begins with a big firework, and there are free drinks and cookies for everyone.

Voluntary work
One of the easiest ways of earning money and having a good time is by working in the cafeteria where you work only from 11-14 and you get to listen music all the time since we have CD player and all kind of CDs. If you like animals you can help with the horses, and all you have to do is to feed them three times a day. There are only four horses and you can ride them sometimes if you know how.

Facilities
Besides all the named ones we also have a large tennis and basketball court, swimming pool and a large garden, which the students decorate as they wish. So enjoy yourself the best way possible and be welcome.

MEMO by V.Ilic - First Check

Vera, please correct the parts of text in bold.

Memo
To: S.B.
From: V.I.
Date: 9/5

Subject: Conference in New York

I have heard about the Marie’s promotion and would be delighted to take her place at the conference. Also I would ask you to send me any information that would help me to get more prepared, since 12th February is soon. Concerning the passport, it is in order and all the arguments can be made.
Until then
Vera

ARTICLE by V.Ilic - 1ST CHECK

Dear Vera,

The sections in bold could be improved. You will notice that your title is also in bold - check instructions for writing articles to get a hint how it could be changed. Please edit your article and post it to our blog.

Green Issue
by Ana Babic

Have you ever given a thought about how many animals are becoming endangered
species? One of the most endangered are certainly the whales, the great kings of the sea. But, what if you could do something to prevent this and at the sometime get to know them better.
So if you really care for wildlife and are keen on helping, you should definitely “adopt” a whale. Adopt a whale is a kind of charity organization which collects money for protection and survival of whales
With a small amount of 17.50$ you can help a lot. Besides the Whale Adoption Certificate you get a free video of your whale, a colors wall poster, a brochure and “ I luv my whale “ sticker. Also you will receive a black and white photo and the whole biography of your whale.
What is very important to say is that all the donations are charity registered, so you know your money will go to who intended it to go. This is a great a opportunity for young and all people alike to help these beautiful animals and also have a great time.

MEMO: CONFERENCE IN NEW YORK by Vera Ilic

Memo
To: S.B.
From: V.I.
Date: 9/5

Subject:Conference in New York

I have heard about the Marie’s promotion and would be delighted to take her place at the conference. Also I would ask you to send me any information that would help me to get more prepared, since 12th February is soon. Concerning the passport, it is in order and all the arguments can be made. Until then
Vera

INFORMATION SHEET: MAKING NEW FRIENDS by Vera Ilic

Clubs
The easiest way of meeting people in our college is certainly by joining in one of many clubs here. If you are the type of people who enjoys poetry then you should differently be a part of the New Poets clubs. Also, there are sports acting and music clubs.

Events
On 12th of May starts the competition of the Young Amateurs of Bristol where all the colleges will compete for the prize. It is a big spectacle where a lot of people come and it always begins with a big firework and there are free drinks and cookies for everyone.

Voluntary work
One of the easiest ways of earning money and having a good time is by working in the cafeteria where you work only from 11-14 and you get to listen music all the time since we have CD player and all kind of CDs. If you like animals you can help with the horses, and all you have to do is to feed them three times a day. There are only four horses and you can ride them sometimes if you know how.

Facilities
Besides all the named ones we also have a large tennis and basketball court, swimming pool and a large garden which the students decorate as they wish. So enjoy yourself the best way possible and be welcome.

ARTICLE: GREEN ISSUE by Vera Ilic

Have you ever given a thought about how many animals are becoming endangered
species? One of the most endangered are certainly the whales, the great kings of the sea. But, what if you could do something to prevent this and at the sometime get to know them better.
So if you really care for wildlife and are keen on helping, you should definitely “adopt” a whale. Adopt a whale is a kind of charity organization which collects money for protection and survival of whales
With a small amount of 17.50$ you can help a lot. Besides the Whale Adoption Certificate you get a free video of your whale, a colors wall poster, a brochure and “ I luv my whale “ sticker. Also you will receive a black and white photo and the whole biography of your whale.
What is very important to say is that all the donations are charity registered, so you know your money will go to who intended it to go. This is a great a opportunity for young and all people alike to help these beautiful animals and also have a great time.