CORRECTIONS FOR INFORMAL LETTER AND MEMO: MARINA

Dear Marina,
Your writing is much better now, but there is still space for improvement. Here are some suggestions:

INFORMAL LETTER

- word count exceeeded: 225 instead of 200
-once in a lifetime = only likely to happen once in a person's life: An opportunity as good as this arises once in a lifetime.
- for life = for the whole of a person's life: I believe marriage is for life.
- she did not miss the wedding – she is unable to attend it
-go round = to go or be given from one person to another, or to move from one place to another: A nasty flu bug's
going round (the school) at the moment.There's a rumour going round (the village) that they're having an affair.
- ’how romantic’ is similar to ’so romantic’, so it would be treated as lifting
-I’ve been wondering
-In the closing remarks, apology should be repeated once again, e.g. Anyway, sorry once again for not coming, but
I’m sure you’ll have a wonderful day.’
-deepest, heartfelt,heartiest, hearty, sincere, warm congratulations
-No coma after best wishes

MEMO

- Word count 77 instead of 50.
- An introductory reference to the letter is is missing, e.g. Thank you for your letter, dated the 15th January.
- I am willing is close to lifting the ’willingness’ from the rubric; change into: ’I will, of course, be delighted to represent the company at the New York conference in February.
- as the second best choice after Marie
-to trust somebody, to have/put trust in somebody